Grafffiti Panel: Glittery Things


One of the things I like about graffiti art is the disparate and random elements that make up the whole and I think I achieved that with the first panel. I am not sure about this one, I sort of like it and sort of don't. Each element is somehow tying into the other making is seem more contrived. I started with the angel and just added. Anyway I would appreciate a critique, your reaction. I can take it, I have my iron knickers on and don't have a fragile ego.



This is a photo I took yesterday of a mural by Sarah Dickens in Keith's Alley in Yellow Springs.

"Creativity is allowing yourself to make mistakes. Art is knowing which ones to keep."
Scott Adams

Comments

jafabrit said…
I am getting rid of the flowers, they are not working for me.
Anonymous said…
Just my oppinion but I would add more writing of the red things to give it more of a Graffiti look. Also that would give one more to look at. Plus if your getting rid of the flowers I think that would be wonderful to take their place you should REALLY have fun with it! Doodle and do what comes from inside! Not telling you what to do though, just commenting as your asking people to do that. It looks great so far! I love it so far! :) YOU GOOOO! I love your work! I bet you will work wonders!
*HUGS*
jafabrit said…
I agree, it needs a stronger background with more text and colour perhaps. thanks angela for taking the time to look and critique.
Shez said…
Ok,my reaction is, what is the theme here, what do you want to convey? Maybe step away from this one for a day or so, it will come to you. Don't force it. Enjoy the process as you did with the first one.....:)
Anonymous said…
I don't think the flowers work either, but i love the bombs and the angel.
Anonymous said…
I think it's going to be fantastic!

It's just at that foetal stage and you will add to it and it will evolve and there will be magic.
It just hasn't morphed yet Jafabrit and yes, there IS something missing.
And that's only because it's not finished yet...
But what does is need?
Keep standing back from it.
I think the graffiti needs more depth. I'm not sure of the red, all red. At the moment it isn't providing enough balance and strength for the angel, who is simply divine.
I like the flowers.
Janets Planet said…
I think if you FILL the background with red text, the flowers will then work.
Diane Dehler said…
Hi,
Thanks for visiting my space and it's a very creative space that you have here.
Heather said…
Love the work...I don't think the flowers are working either...unless there were some bombs laying in them...I like the angel, she so rocks, but maybe some text in that style that is all thick letters too...I always see that mixed in with the tagger style text round here anyway...maybe so text that crosses over onto the angel in someway to tie her to the background...I am sure you will make it great whatever you end up doing.
jafabrit said…
what I am hearing and what I feel too is a need for stronger background, bold text.I agree hmbt, some of the text/background should cross over onto the angel. thanks all for the taking the time to comment.
jafabrit said…
thanks for visiting haiku :)
Cynthia said…
Your quote is aptly linked with your first comment.

I think part of the appeal of graffiti art is that it grows, changes, morphs as more people add to it, cover up bits and pieces. I think maybe the piece needs to sit in the corner somewhere. Start another one and every so often, go tag your painting!
Dr.John said…
I don't know what works but to me it looks like the poster for a horror movie.
jafabrit said…
I like that it looks like that to you dr.john :)
Lynette said…
I think your angel looks awesomely dark and eerie J.B. and her face and hands gives me the shivers! I love it!
Anonymous said…
Mural in Keith's Alley: Sarah Dickens.

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